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Old man by the crest of the sea
steadied upon rusted spear. Flatline
gaze and steely eyes, world-weary
and weak.  Black bird
overhead in a spiral trap,
wide-eyed in the ocean's wake.

Outstretched hands and a pouch of ash
sifting through the gale-winds.  
With every gust comes a bitter
faltering in the branches
of a windswept elder tree.

The old man's children succumbed
one by one, to the fires of war;
charred flesh bound and burned.
One by one, hunted or drawn
by the allure of a greater Father.

For time beyond memory, he took
to wandering the wilder places,
watching a world caught in
subtle devouring.

To the stones by the sea
would be his last journey.

With the ashes spread beyond
the winds, he offers the dead
a quiet eulogy: "You were the last
of those who kept my memory.
No legendary heroes' hall awaits
the last of the old gods."
Men die in time. Gods are forgotten.
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Lupina24 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful, sad and well written. I love the old god's eulogy very poignant. You use good visualization with the stones and the sea. This reminds me of the Teutonic gods especially Odin.
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KlaxonLithology Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2011
Good observation!
It was exactly about Odin.
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lekosis Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Very precise word choice, and I adore the content. You've got beautifully vivid images, too. All around a gorgeous piece.
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KlaxonLithology Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011
Thanks!
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written. It takes you to the time and place. I was imagining Odin in some ways, or maybe Manannan Mac Lir- but I suppose it works well with many figures.
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KlaxonLithology Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011
The intention was Odin, though without saying it. The spear, the black birds, the 'legendary heroes' hall' (Valhalla), the wandering, etc.

And that it was written as a poem, I suppose.
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well done. The Norse Gods were always a bit more mortal than some other pantheons.
The Celts were big on black birds as well- they were very similar in many respects.
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KlaxonLithology Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011
That's part of the reason they're my favorite pantheon. It kind of...helps one relate if the gods aren't so far from being human.
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I think a lot of pantheons start out that way. It is said some gods are base on legends of humans. I guess the Norse Gods are a grim bunch, but they probably reflected certain realities in which they were made.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2011   Writer
Reading this was a wonderful experience - it has the depth of actual perception.
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